Saturday, March 20, 2010

Text Production Essay # Draft 1

What are the potential effects of global warming in terms of climate change and how can they be arrested?

The planet is warming in accordance with the fast pace development worldwide. Human beings are creating pollutions for the sake of urbanisation and industrialisation. The previous natural vegetations have been replaced by concrete jungles and skyscrapers (Nzone Tonight, 2008). These developments have increase the greenhouse emissions especially carbon dioxide (CO2) which contribute to global warming. Nowadays, the weather pattern fluctuates drastically and we, human beings ourselves are suffering from the effects of extreme weather (Chris Woodford, 2006). Global warming not only affects the life of human beings but also flora and fauna as well as the environment. Therefore, pragmatic actions should be done to arrest the further impacts of global warming.

Global warming causes both average and extreme temperature to alter. Majority parts of the world are experiencing more hot days and fewer cool days as the heat waves are intensifying. (Holli Riebeek, 2007). Chris Woodford (2006) states that intense rainfall, more snowfalls, extended droughts and more frequent hurricanes or storms could be the consequences of extreme weather. These phenomenons bring devastating destructions. Moreover, warmer weather also causes glaciers and polar ice shelves melt. Arctic is one of the fastest regions to take on the impacts of global warming. The cracking of the largest Arctic ice self, Ward Hunt ice shelf six years ago is the most significant evidence as stated in the film An Inconvenient Truth A Global Warming (2007). This could lead to loss of coastal areas and a greater risk of flooding in coastal areas. Chris Woodford (2006) predicts that increasing sea level could cause millions of people homeless forever by 2100.

In addition, biodiversity is severely affected by global warming. Many species of plants and animals face the danger of extinction as they cannot adapt to the sudden change in climate. According to the film An Inconvenient Truth A Global Warming (2007), the rate of species loss is 1000 times larger than the natural background nowadays. As a result of the climate change, crops are easier to be cultivated in some regions while the other regions may fail to produce the crops. This situation causes food shortages and famine in the poorer countries (Holli Riebeek, 2007).
Moreover, global warming gives rise to the outbreak of infectious diseases such as malaria, dengue, SARS and avian flu. This is because increasing temperature favours their surviving conditions. Vectors move to higher elevations due to the warming effect. Therefore, there is an expansion of territories for disease-carrying vectors.

Revising all of the negative impacts brought by global warming, it is a crucial time to alleviate the damages that have occurred. In order to reduce global warming, the main contributor which is the emissions of greenhouse gases needs to be reduced in the first context. This can be done by using energy more efficiently. Burning of fossil fuels to generate power can be replaced by renewable energy such as solar energy and wind energy. Green energy can also be the offered by power company; the market demand for hybrid cars should also be widen for environmental conscious. On the other hand, personal efforts to produce less carbon dioxide are important as well. For example, we can use environmental friendly products like fluorescent lamps, public transports and electrical efficient appliances (Chris Woodford, 2006). In daily life, we should plant more trees and practice recycling. This solution method is also supported by the film An Inconvenient Truth A Global Warming (2007) which shows that the emissions of carbon dioxide can be as low as the emissions in 1970s if the above initiatives are implemented. At the same time, legislation can also be the other effective move to solve global warming. The law should be stringent and practical enough for the public to obey. This approach is only valid when we vote for the government who pledge to solve this crisis.

Nzone Tonight (2008) shows that we cannot predict the next global signal and what we can do is we adapt to the climate change as all the natural disasters cannot be stopped. All the parties should work hand in hand to preserve the standard of living and the wealth of the planet. In the film An Inconvenient Truth A Global Warming (2007), Al Gore also says that we human ourselves must have the capability to mend this crisis from the past evidences of the noble scientists. We have only one Mother Earth, it is our responsibility to protect her and for the future generations.

5 comments:

  1. It really seem long right??haiz..
    Give me some suggestions how to cut it shorter and help me to check my grammar and spelling...Thx a lot....

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  2. Mine also is a bit too long. >.<

    In the first paragraph, I think it is better if you cite the speaker rather than the show itself, ie: Prof Bob Carter. Not Nzone.

    This sentence:
    "Majority parts of the world are experiencing more hot days and fewer cool days as the heat waves are intensifying"
    Your sentence seem to be a bit weird? The world is not experiencing more hot days and cool days due to the heat waves intensifying, it should be the other way around, I think?

    Good work overall. =)

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  3. 1. The first few sentences were good. Clear and very interesting introduction. =) However, I felt that this sentence “ Nowadays….. suffering from the effects of extreme weather (Chris Woodford, 2006)” doesn’t really fits in. May be you might consider taking it out? That way, you are able to stick to the word limit.


    2. It is a clear thesis statement. But “pragmatic actions should be done to arrest the further impacts of global warming”… may “taken” is a better word to use instead of "done"?

    3. Each paragraph is well written. The supporting details and examples are clear and easy to comprehend. =)

    4. No complains =P

    5. 4th Paragraph : Green energy can also be the offered by power company; it should be green energy can also be offered by power company? Or better still.. power company can offer green energy? Less confusion if do so

    6. I think may be you should use “Prof Bob Carter from Nzone Tonight (2008)…” by doing so it some sort shows the credibility of that person. But overall, it is a good conclusion. Well done!

    7. Did you forget to cite for the ending of the 3rd paragraph?

    8. 2nd paragraph.. experiencing more hot days and fewer cool days as the heat waves are intensifying…it should be hotter days and fewer cooler days =D

    9. Yep, you covered everything that I know off. Don’t worry.

    10. A job well done! It was informative and factual. However, may be you should split the 4th paragraph into two? It seems too long, not standardized. I think so only… =P

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  4. haha sorry forget to mention this..
    2nd para: Chris Woodford (2006) predicts that increasing sea level could cause millions of people homeless forever by 2100.

    Homeless forever like a bit too exaggerate.. maybe u might consider cutting out that "forever" word?

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  5. Thanks a lot..Michelle...But if i split 4th paragraph into 2 the new paragraph would be too short..And i cant add more words..Over dy..T.T

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